Am I too cold in this letter?

tatters

New member
In recent days, a lot of attention has been brought to the public involving shootings, including the little 6 yo girl. I wrote a letter to the papers, is it too cold feeling?
Whatcha think? (REVISED)

As we know, owning a firearm these days is not in fashion. In fact, it is seen as a crime against humanity by some. We stand dumbfounded as a 6 year old child dies at the hands of another using a firearm. If you are a caring parent, these tragedies must strike close to home.

I liken these shootings to airplane crashes. They are top stories in the media. Yes, it is a horrible thing, and one innocent victim is too many. Anyone with a shred of compassion will agree. But, they happen more rarely than automobile accidents. Most gun owners have never allowed their kids unsupervised access to guns. More laws are not the answer. Responsibility is the key. The person or persons who allowed that child access to a gun should be the ones held responsible.

The anti gun folks want the public to see the terrible carnage brought forth by the evil gun. They don’t want you to see the times a firearm is used to thwart an attack by some thug on an innocent citizen while away or in the home. They don’t want you to see the number of firearms legally and humanely used by hunters, or used safely in competitive shooting events. According to them, there are hundreds of thousands of guns in the U.S. and they are all bad. They want you to believe that guns are the cause of crime, and if you have a gun, you intend to do harm to someone or something or will soon injure someone in your household. If this is so, why don’t I hear gunfire in my neighborhood right now?

It has been my experience that safe, responsible gun owners, be they hunters, target shooters, or the citizen with a permit to carry are the rule rather than the exception . We live here, in small town U.S.A. where deer season is cause to take off work, and farmers use guns frequently for predator control. Around here, lots of kids grew up shooting cans off fence posts. Many people legally carry firearms on a daily basis for personal protection. We are men and women, doctors and lawyers , blue and white collar workers from every background, and ethnic group. Are we all wrong?

Let’s face the facts. Jim Didier and Prince Chapman, two beloved and respected citizens, died at the hands of the very type of criminal we need to protect ourselves and our families from. Is our desire to do so with firearms that unreasonable?

An innocent child has died due to irresponsibility by an adult, but let’s keep perspective regarding the gun control issue. More gun laws would not have helped here. Common sense cannot be legislated.

Footnote:
Jim Didier was a local man who was killed in an attempted robbery at his meat shop. Wonderful man, by all accounts, and gave much to the less fortunate in the community. The outpouring of sympathy was astonishing.
Prince Chapman was gunned down on a sidewalk near his home if I remember right by the same folks he tried to help. The suspect was a very young man who shot him in a gang initiation ritual. Mr Chapman spent a great deal of time trying to help youngsters find their way in life.

Note from Tatters: I changed this around a little,and shortened it up a bit. Check it out now, ok?
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Very well put, It's a printer :)

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Anonymous
 
I would make one small change. The "in my opinion" has to go. You are siting a fact, not an opinion.

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Those who carried materials did their work with one hand and held a weapon in the other, and each of the builders wore his sword at his side as he worked.
Nehemiah 4:17,18
 
Good Evening Everyone-

Good letter you wrote, Tatters. All the TFLers are certainly on the same sheet of music with you. Not a flame, but if you'll allow a little constructive criticism:

Newspapers edit letters like there is no tomorrow. It's crucial that letters to the editor are no more than 3 paragraphs with no more than 3 sentences per paragraph.

Utilize the word "I" as little as possible. Use of "I" brings the attention and interest towards the author, rather than the audience, where it belongs.

My company sent us through a professional writing course to sharpen us for negotiation skills and clear communications. These suggestions came straight from them.

Regards,

~ Blue Jays ~
 
Thanks, Blue and sbryce for the suggestions. Thanks loknload for the kudos. Blue- is the use of "we" recommended?
NOTE:
Look at my first post, I revised it. Thanks again.
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Knock twice. Rap with your cane. Feels nice. You're out of the rain. We got your skinny girls. Here at the Western World
from Steely Dan's "Western World"

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Right on, brother. State the facts, unemotional except for empathy, to the point- which reads to be: The media is missing the point and thereby misleading the public.

Do you mind if I use it on my upcoming website?

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Thanks alot, and help yourself, JeepBear!

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Knock twice. Rap with your cane. Feels nice. You're out of the rain. We got your skinny girls. Here at the Western World
from Steely Dan's "Western World"
 
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